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Experience as a Shop-assistant forForeigners

2006-07-29 14:47

  A few years ago, when I was a pupil, my teacher gave me a chance to go to the Children's Palace to be a shop-assistant serving .for[serving ] (1) the foreign friends from the USA, Britain, Japan and other countries. I thought it was a very good chance for me to practise English. So I accepted it.

  The teachers of the Children's Palace asked me to work there in every [every] (2) Tuesday afternoon.

  Once, an old American lady with her little granddaughter came to my counter and asked for some handicrafts [handicraftarticles] (3) . It was difficult to talk with the old lady  without a translator [an interpreter] ( 4 ) . I used all the English I  had studied [I tried to make myself understood with the little English I had learnt in my English lessons ] ( 5 ) . Finally I  understood that she wanted to buy her granddaughter a special present. There were some little toy chicks made of woolen cloth [little woollen chicks ] ( 6 ) , some pencil sharpeners, and souvenir badges. But I did not think they were special. Suddenly I saw an elegant golden abacus (算盘)。 The abacus is the earliest  comcputer [calculator] (7) in the world, and it was invented by the Chinese people. I thought the abacus was a special thing the lady might want. Then I put it on the counter. I poked one of the small golden pearl [balls on the abacus] (8) , and said,“one,”I poked another, “two,”… At last when I counted up to ten, the little girl cried, “It's interesting! Granny, I want it. ”  The old lady bought the abacus with a smile.

  The little girl was very happy. So was I. I did my first, and a special, business in my life.

  上海市晋元中学高二(5)班  崔毅明

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  文章叙述清楚生动,行文流畅自然,构思中突出了“究竟为外国老太太的孙女选什么样的商品最能表现出中国的特点”这一中心,因而文章虽短,却颇有意义。此外,就语言而言,词语、句子结构运用也较老练。文章中某些语言上的不足之处点评修改如下:

  (1)serve表不“为……服务”时,是及物动词,如serve the people,不用介词。注意不要受汉语影响。

  (2)this,that,last,next,every 等词后接时间名词时,前面一般不再用介词。如:every day,this afternoon,next week等。

  (3)“工艺品”一般说成 handicraft articles.

  (4)现场口译者一般用 interpreter,translator 多用做笔译。

  (5)原句有中国味,故改之。

  (6)改成 little woollen chicks要简洁多了。 woollen或woolen两种拼写都对。

  (7)computer 一般指计算机。“计算器”用 calculator .

  (8)算盘珠不能用 pearl(珍珠)表示,可用 small ball (小球丸状物)指代。

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