外语教育网
您的位置:外语教育网 > 基础英语 > 英语写作 > 写作范文 正文
  • 站内搜索:

A Visit to Great Buddha of Leshan

2006-07-29 15:43

  I visited Great Buddha of Leshan during my winter holidays. I heard of Great Buddha when I was only a child. My grandma had told me that it was as high as a hill. So I had always dreamed of visiting it.

  On the way where Great Buddha was situated[to the place where Great Buddha was situated] (1), we saw many temples. All kinds of images of Buddha could be seen there.

  We walked quickly, eager to see that Great Buddha.“Oh, it's there!”my sister suddenly cried. We ran to it with great Joy. How large it was! Standing on the top of the hill [a hill](2), we could see his head clearly. Looking down, we could see the whole of his body. Facing him you were just like an ant. A single toe of his had enough room for one hundred people [to stand on] (3)。 He sat against mountains and faced three rivers with a holy and pure smile. It is said that people in ancient times built him in order to let him govern the spirits in the rivers and prevent them from doing damage[harm] (4) to people. For thousand years[thousands of years](5), Great Buddha has witnessed changes around him. I guess he may be satisfied when he sees that the people around him are living a happy life now.

  On the way home, I was wondering all the time how the Buddha was[had been] (6) built without modern machines. Was it God who built it? No, it was people. And I couldn't help feeling proud of my people, people of great wisdom.

  锡山市中学高二(7)班  陈依敏

  评    语

  游记一般比较难写,因为它往往需要较大的词汇量,有些具体的情景用英语也较难表达。这篇游记写得简洁明了,抓住重点,突出描写大佛,想表达的内容基本表达清楚了,所发的感想也较自然。文章中某些语言上的不足之处点评修改如下:

  (1)作者可能受了“on the way+副词”结构的影响,但这里这样表达不自然,故改之。

  (2)第一次提到hill,宜用不定冠词a.

  (3)加上to stand on语义更清楚。

  (4)一般说 do harm to sb.。

  (5)要么说 a/one thousand years,要么说thousands of years.

  (6)根据上下文,这里宜用过去完成时。

相关热词:写作 范文
栏目相关课程表
科目名称 主讲老师 课时 免费试听 优惠价 购买课程
英语零起点 郭俊霞 30课时 试听 150元/门 购买
综艺乐园 ------ 15课时 试听 100元/门 购买
边玩边学 ------ 10课时 试听 60元/门 购买
情景喜剧 ------ 15课时 试听 100元/门 购买
欢乐课堂 ------ 35课时 试听 150元/门 购买
趣味英语速成 钟 平 18课时 试听 179元/门 购买
剑桥少儿英语预备级 (Pre-Starters) ------ ------ 试听 200元/门 购买
剑桥少儿英语一级 (Starters) ------ ------ 试听 200元/门 购买
剑桥少儿英语二级 (Movers) ------ ------ 试听 200元/门 购买
剑桥少儿英语三级 (Flyers) ------ ------ 试听 200元/门 购买
初级英语口语 ------ 55课时 ------ 350元/门 购买
中级英语口语 ------ 83课时 ------ 350元/门 购买
高级英语口语 ------ 122课时 ------ 350元/门 购买
基础英语辅导课程
郭俊霞 北京语言大学毕业,国内某知名中学英语教研组长,教学标兵……详情>>
郭俊霞:零基础英语网上辅导名师
钟平 北大才俊,英语辅导专家,累计从事英语教学八年,机械化翻译公式发明人……详情>>
钟平:趣味英语速成网上辅导名师

  1、凡本网注明 “来源:外语教育网”的所有作品,版权均属外语教育网所有,未经本网授权不得转载、链接、转贴或以其他方式使用;已经本网授权的,应在授权范围内使用,且必须注明“来源:外语教育网”。违反上述声明者,本网将追究其法律责任。
  2、本网部分资料为网上搜集转载,均尽力标明作者和出处。对于本网刊载作品涉及版权等问题的,请作者与本网站联系,本网站核实确认后会尽快予以处理。本网转载之作品,并不意味着认同该作品的观点或真实性。如其他媒体、网站或个人转载使用,请与著作权人联系,并自负法律责任。
  3、联系方式
  编辑信箱:for68@chinaacc.com
  电话:010-82319999-2371